matching tattoos for lovers
Like this?
One day I, Emma Cotter called me on his bike and rode straight ahead of me both on the road in life was then Raised when I gave my white flag of hope I saw what I was asking for No fire, just smoke, there's no hope for my pitiful self annoying as I would like be for all I have to do for hours is Pen sentences and poetry, but I can still play with the faith I can do things better as I'm sure that won her heart with truths scribbled on my next day I saw her She was laughing with his friends more likely is that I end here my fascination as lovers We were once not can return to that day and reasoning to slip through She told me yesterday that I follow and find a girl named Sue We can embrace under the stars and Scratch Tattoo Matching Sue But she must be busy have not been over since I have nothing to do what my love is too strong Emma
"Do not you come? "The first eight lines are very strong, concrete action, but can also be considered by the reader to be abstract ("she rode right before me / both on the road as in life) – very nice, and understanding comes through the eight lines to move the "I" in the middle very well. The rest of the poem spirals in line at a triviality. I would suggest keeping only the first eight lines.
